Critique - Moehogs

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Critique - Moehogs

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I drew this because I need to finalize the design of my favourite pet, Kwey-Kwey! She was a lab pet until the lab decided to give her this form, and it was so perfect I retired my lab. She's slightly off-color because the faerie Moehog coloration would have been eye-wrenching if I tried to pull it off.

<a href=http://www.deviantart.com/view/29585098>Click</a>

Yep. She's slightly round 'round the middle =) Think of a hooved bulldog.
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Post by Cheese »

I don't think deviantart allow direct linking. Try http://www.imageshack.us or http://www.photobucket.com
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Ack.

I've linked it. Neither Imageshack or Photobucket is working for me.
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Post by Settingshadow »

Awww...it's cute.

I like it -- the hair in particular is very nice and shiny.
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Post by chickvw »

So cute... i LOVE the hair!
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Post by Jazzy »

Basically, you need to work on your neatness. The lines are blurry and look a little shaky, and they aren't very carefully placed. The top of the tail, for example, seems to defy gravity; it shouldn't point upwards. The soft shading doesn't match the harsh shading on the mane and tail, and doesn't seem to have the same lightsource. The anatomy's generally good, but in places it's a bit too exaggerated (for example, the eyebrows, the leg closest to us, the front hooves).

Overall, it's really cute, but it could do with some polishing up.
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Post by chocolatefairy13 »

Very cute, nice colors.

The look on her face seems a bit....disturbing, though. :|
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Post by Fish »

=) Yey, critiques!

My lineart is much cleaner than it used to be, but I am getting used to my tablet still. See, if I press too hard on the pen, the line wiggles. If I don't press enough, the line is invisible. The only brush sizes it works well at are 3, 4, and 5, above or below are too large to too small. So, I either have invisi-lines, shaky lines, or work at huge sizes and scale down, blurring lines further. I will keep it in mind and try to work on what natural shakiness I can, but most of it is beyond my control unless my pen starts behaving ;D

I thank you for pointing out my lightsource problems. It looks like I need to start placing a big yellow ball again to show where my lights coming from, because even I can see how badly I screwed it up X_x I can also see the little places my color leaked through... oops. And the exaggeration has developed over time. A style, if you will. I can deviate from it, certainly, but it's the thing I apply to most of my cartoonish work. I'm a huge fan of proper anatomy (watch me draw plausible griffin/dragon skeletons!) but I like exaggerating things where it allows, especially if it can lend to the character. KK is short and round, with legs that taper and heavy hooves, and I tried to get that out there. The tail thing is just an active swoop I do, you can see it at the top of her hair as well, but I can see why you say it defies gravity. I could definitely stand to tone it down.

All in all, thanks ;D It's rare I actually get critiques I can reply to!

And ChocolateFaerie... I'm glad you picked up on that. KK by nature is extreme. When she was born, she was the crazy-goof roleplay character. Now that's she's past labbing, she's just a weensy bit disconcerting ;D

And, brand new Moehog art! This is of Kesaira, who Settingshadows kindly let me adopt. He's a robo-Hog.

<a href=http://www.deviantart.com/view/29679954/>Robo-Hog!</a>

I based his anatomy on a horse, since he's supposed to be scrawny and all. I think his torso is too long and thin, and his far hindleg is too long, but otherwise, anything else I missed?
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Post by Settingshadow »

It's a beautiful custom design and the anatomy looks okay to me, but I really only know human anatomy, and I know that from a medical perspective, not an artistic one.

But I find it a simply beautiful drawing and it makes me very happy that Kesaira obviously found a good home with you =)
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It looks like I need to start placing a big yellow ball again to show where my lights coming from, because even I can see how badly I screwed it up X_x
Hee, I still do that :) It's really helpful, because often it's easy to just do the shading that looks good rather than the shading that fits the source.

What program are you using, Photoshop? I found that it isn't very forgiving- Corel Painter, for instance, seems to be better with people whose lines are a little shaky, and Flash, of course, will smooth them for you. Flash teaches awful habits but it makes things so clean...otherwise, in Photoshop itself, try turning on Colour Burn in the brush options, because that makes the lines less blurry. You can also fiddle with settings for the brush and for your tablet so that it comes out cleaner.
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Hmm. Maybe I could try to edit the pen pressure adjustments, since CS is designed to automatically set tablet pen adjustable items to "Pen Pressure". I have the size jitter at that, so the lines taper and things, maybe if I could tone it down I could fix it.

I use CS because it's all we have XD We got a $1600 program for free, without pirating anything. Woo.
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